高中英语：高考写作精练

【写作任务】 假设你是高三学生陈辉，你在某英文杂志社Help栏目中TalkwithMr.Helper的主持人Mr.Smith帮助下减轻了压力，目前在备考中一切顺利。现在请你给Mr.Smith写一封感谢信，要点包括：1.感谢Mr.Smith；2.如何减轻压力；目前学习状况；3.再次表达感谢。注意：1.词数100左右(信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数)；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。DearMr.Smith,I’mChenHui,astudentthatyouhelpedthreeweeksago._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,ChenHui写作步骤Step1:审题(1)体裁：此书面表达要求写一封信表达感谢，属于应用文；(2)人称：以第一人称和第二人称为主；(3)时态：以一般过去时为主。Step2:内容要点及写作顺序(1)表达感谢；(2)“我”采纳了减压的建议；(3)参加体育运动减压；(4)听音乐放松自己；(5)“我”已改变对考试的态度；(6)“我”在上周测试中得了第一名；(7)没有你的帮助，“我”不会取得这么快的进步；(8)“我”目前忙于备考，但也会抽时间参加社交活动；(9)“我”相信在即将到来的考试中“我”会取得成功；(10)再次致谢。Step3:注意事项(1)分段：此感谢信正文可以分为三段。第一段：表明写信目的——感谢；第二段：如何减轻压力并告知对方自己目前的学习情况；第三段：再次致谢。(2)感谢信写作要有诚意，语言要具体，不能落空或落于俗套。(3)行文思路要清晰，拓展信息要合理，用语要简洁、精炼，避免使用繁杂句式，前后要照应，句、段之间要使用恰当的衔接成分。参考范文DearMr.Smith,I’mChenHui,astudentthatyouhelpedthreeweeksago.I’mwritingtoexpressmydeepappreciationofthekindhelpyouofferedtome.Havingconsultedyou,Ifollowedyouradviceonhowtocopewithstress.Tobeginwith,Itooksomephysicalexercise,suchasplayingfootball.Additionally,bylisteningtomusic,Ibecamerelaxed.Moreimportantly,Ihavechangedmyattitudetowardexams.Inthetestheldlastweek,Igotthefirstplace.Withoutyourhelp,Iwouldn’thavemadesuchrapidprogress.Atpresent,whileoccupiedwithmystudies,Imanagetosparesometimetoparticipateinsomesocialactivities.I’mconvincedthatI’llsucceedinthecomingexam.Again,Iwouldliketoexpressmywarmthankstoyou.Yours,ChenHui点评(1)此感谢信写作正文结构安排恰当，拓展信息合理，表达准确、语气恰当。正文共分三段。第一段：表明写信目的——感谢；第二段：如何减轻压力并告知对方自己目前的学习情况；第三段：再次致谢。(2)范文使用的亮点词语：appreciation,consult,copewith,additionally,rapid,occupiedwith,spare及participatein等。亮点句式：Havingconsultedyou…(V-ing结构作状语),Withoutyourhelp,Iwouldn’thavemadesuchrapidprogress(虚拟语气的使用),…whileoccupiedwithmystudies…(状语从句的省略)等。【一句多译】1.Havingconsultedyou,Ifollowedyouradviceonhowtocopewithstress.◆AfterIconsultedyou,Ifollowedyouradviceonhowtodealwithstress.◆Afterconsultingyou,Itookyouradviceonhowtocopewithstress.2.Moreimportantly,Ihavechangedmyattitudetowardexams.◆WhatismoreimportantisthatIhavechangedmyattitudetowardexams.◆Ihavechangedmyattitudetowardexams,whichismoreimportant.◆ItismoreimportantthatIhavechangedmyattitudetowardexams.3.Withoutyourhelp,Iwouldn’thavemadesuchrapidprogress.◆Ifithadn’tbeenforyourhelp,Iwouldn’thavemadesuchrapidprogress.◆Ifyouhadn’thelpedme,Iwouldn’thavemadesuchrapidprogress.◆Hadyounothelpedme,Iwouldn’thavemadesuchrapidprogress.◆Butforyourhelp,Iwouldn’thavemadesuchrapidprogress.4.Atpresent,whileoccupiedwithmystudies,Imanagetosparesometimetoparticipateinsomesocialactivities.◆Atpresent,whileI’moccupiedwithmystudies,Imanagetosparesometimetoparticipateinsomesocialactivities.◆Atpresent,althoughI’moccupiedwithmystudies,Imanagetosparesometimetoparticipateinsomesocialactivities.